Friday, March 18, 2011

Second Crusader Writing Challenge: Splash!

I love writing challenges! As part of the continuing Crusader blogfest, today's challenge from Rachael involves a 100-word flash fiction beginning with the words, "The goldfish bowl teetered..."  Fun, eh?!  So here's my entry.  It's titled "Splash."

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The goldfish bowl teetered inside my backpack. Beneath a streetlight, I stopped to peek inside. Water sloshed onto my math homework.


“Almost there, Guinevere,” I whispered.

Guinevere’s lips quivered. We’d only been best friends a week but I knew that look. She was getting ready to cry.

Clutching my backpack, I crept along Roosevelt Elementary School till I found the open window. I placed my backpack on the ledge and hopped inside.  My chest pounding, I tiptoed to the goldfish bowl on Mr. Jacquat’s desk.

“You’re home,” I told Guinevere, dropping her into the bowl with Lancelot.

41 comments:

Margo Benson said...

Oh that's adorable! Congrats on being so quick off the mark!

Michael Di Gesu said...

This is sweet. I love the names you gave the fish...

You are like the first person to post you flash fiction. You go LIZ!

Charity Bradford said...

Oh, that is so sweet! I love how you gave the fish human characteristics. It really made me wonder.

Angelina Rain said...

What a cute little story. I really enjoyed it. How do you sign up for this crusader challenge thing? I love writing challenges and would love to give this a try.

Liz Fichera said...

Angelina, click on the link at the beginning of the post and then visit Rachael's site for the deets. I think (althought not completely sure) that you have to have already signed up for the Second Crusader BlogFest. But Rachael would be able to answer that for you.

Linda Leszczuk said...

Aw, that was great.

pamparker said...

Adorable flash - how did you do that so quickly???? Well done.

Carol Riggs said...

Aw! Guinevere and Lancelot! Perfect. Amazing how you can have a complete story in 100 words. :) Great job.

Carrie said...

Love it!

Heather M. Gardner said...

Sweet story, Liz. Thanks for sharing it with us!

Liz Fichera said...

Thanks, all! Appreciate the nice comments.

jenniferelliott14 said...

Awwwwww, I love your flash fiction. Very cute and visual. :)

Rachael Harrie said...

Aw, that's so sweet Liz!

I had a problem with my linky link, so your entry's been lost :( Can you pop back and re-link please, so everyone can find you. So sorry about that!

Hugs,

Rach

Angela Scott said...

Very nice. I could picture the whole thing. Everyone keeps saying sweet and I struggled to find a different word, but sweet it is.

I really enjoyed this. Well done.

Sarah Ketley (constance) said...

awwwww so cute, :-)

i love the name Guinevere. :-)

Sarah

Adina West said...

Awww, a fishy romance. Masterful!

Ellie said...

Oh, wow. I loved that. So romantic. Sigh.

Deniz Bevan said...

Oh, isn't that lovely! So sweet and perfect. Great entry!

Danette said...

Very cute little story! hmmm.. just how do you see a goldfish cry? :)

Madeleine said...

Cute and imaginative :O)

Cherie Reich said...

Aww! This is so cute and sweet.

Summer Ross said...

This was a great read. I could picture easily what was happening and I love how she wanted them to be together! So sweet!

Ben Langhinrchs said...

Ah, true love. I like the water sloshing onto the math homework. One of the hardest things about flash fiction is to make it feel like you're including the little details, which you did well.

Jen said...

So cute!! I love this.

Holly Vance said...

Really creative! I love it.

raisingmarshmallows said...

I could really picture that happening in my head. I loved it!

Nikki

Sierra Gardner said...

This is really great Liz! A romance is irresistible =)

Cally J said...

Totally adorable. Don't cry, little fishy!

Trisha said...

Aww, that is so cute!! Love it :)

Amanda Milner said...

How darling! Lol! Everyone already used sweet & cute. ;) Love the names! I had a fish named Sir Swimsalot. hehe, Get it? (sure swims a lot) Yes, I am a big DORK.

alberta ross said...

sooo good - liked it very much - but how do you know a fish is crying!!!that was the best bit for me - well maybe getting into the bowl with the fellar!

Jeanne said...

Oh I love this. Kids lit is one of my passions too. I will put myself on to follow you.

~Nicole Ducleroir~ said...

Sweet story! And I love how it could be interpreted in different ways. If the fish are real fish, it's an adorable children's story. But if it's a magical, fantasy story...then brand new interpretations open up!

Happily Cheesy said...

Very nice.

Alison Stevens said...

I love it!

Sylvia van Bruggen said...

Adorable!!! :)

Catherine Johnson said...

So cute, nice one!

Kari Marie said...

Awww! This was so sweet!

Alison Miller said...

Awww - love this!!! So clever. Except I didn't like her math homework getting all wet (says the math teacher)

Awesome job!

J.L. Campbell said...

Liz,

I think that's really cute.
I'm still smiling after reading that. Makes me wanna sing 'reunited and it feels so good!'

Bess Weatherby said...

Aw! Yay. That was adorable!